GMAT Sample Essays 6 - Waymarsh University Essay Prompt
The following is taken from a sample essay prompt (Analytical Writing Assignment Section) of the GMAT:
The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh City newspaper.
“Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.”
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Sample Essay #1
In this argument the author reach conclusion that better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Based on the demographic trends that indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years, the author maintain that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. At first glance, the author’s argument appears to be somewhat convincing, but there are some reasoning flaws in this argument.
In the first place, the author provides no evidence to support the claim that all academic job seekers including those from Waymarsh can find teaching jobs at college-level more easily in the next decade. The author falsely depends on gratuitous assumption that throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers. The bad situation of job market to teaching job seekers at college-level in last two decades and the improved status in the coming decade have no causal relationship. In addition, all other relevant reasons of bad hiring status to teaching job seekers at college level must be ruled out. In order to prove the conclusion, we need to know whether the market demand decrease or the structure change of market demand leads to all graduate hardly find jobs. if the reason is the latter, the market do not need the human resources of these academic specification. Thus even the market become prosperous, graduates will easily find teaching jobs. especially the status will be not improved if the graduates from Waymarsh can not meet the specification requirement in the market. moreover, the author’s assumption that the better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers is groundless without any evidence to prove.
In the second place, the Demographic trends cited by the author is too vague to be informative. The claim does not indicate the range which the trends are applicable, national or local. if the dempographic trends just represent the local situation other than the place in Waymarsh City, we can not figure out that the number of people will increase and more people will need to get college education in next decade. Even though the demographic trends show national situation, it do not necessarily that job market will improve dramatically. It is sufficient to assume the population increase will result in the increase of market demand to college education and the increase of market demand will lead to the recruitment increase of academic teachers. The people prefer to take short-term job training in the next decade, or the college make use of new technology to offer education program in place of the meathod of hiring more teachers.
In conclusion, the author fails to provide adequate justification for the reason that job seeker from Waymarsh will easily find teaching jobs in next decade. As it stands, the reasoning constitute some critical flaws. To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide evidence to prove that the bad status of job market only came from the market situation, not from the market structure. to better assess the argument, we need additional detailed information about the demographic trends so that we can establish the conclusion whether the graduates from Waymarsh will easily find teaching job in next decade.
Sample Essay #2
This argument is based on 3 premises ; (1) Throughout the last two decades, those who get graduate degrees are hard to find the jobs in college. (2) People graduated from Waymarsh University especially were hard to find the jobs. (3) Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; Therefore job market will be improved dramatically for people seeking college level teaching positions in their fields. This argument is hard to convince me because it lacks the relation between job market in college and number of people, and it also didn’t tell us the position of people graduated from Waymarsh University in whole graduated people.
The relation between increasing number of people and job market in college is lacked in the premises. According to the argument, we didn’t know whether people number increasing will add job opportunities in college. There are several connections are missed. We can strengthen it by adding several premises. For example, adding one premise that study shows that increasing number of people will increases the number of student to strengthen it. Once the number of students is increased, One premise can be added; “For the purpose of fitting the ratio between teachers and students, teacher number need to be increased.” After we added these two premises, we have builded up the relationship between increasing number of people and job opportunities in college.
Even though we added the relationship between increasing number of people and job opportunities in college, the reputation of people graduated from Waymarsh are still unknown, or there are some other reasons that everybody didn’t want to hire people from it. Although the job opportunities are increased, people graduated from Waymarsh University still can find a job in college. In order to strengthen the argument, we can add the premise, “Compare to the people graduated from other university, people graduated from Waymarsh University is easier to find a job in college.”, then we know once the job opportunities are increased, people graduated from Waymarsh university are easier to find a job in college.
Sample Essay #3
In this article, the author believes that academic job opportunities will increase in the next ten years. In supporting his conclusion, he notes two pieces of evidence. First, people who earned graduate degrees found it very hard to get jobs teaching their specialties at the college level, especially for Waymarsh University students. Second, demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years. Although the argument may seem reasonable, a close examination reveals it is a groundless assertion. I disagree with the author’s argument because it is an oversimplification.
First, based on a specific example of difficulty in finding academic teaching jobs of Waymarsh University graduates, it is illogical to assume all people with graduate degrees also have difficulty in finding academic jobs. Even during times of recession, qualified people who are superior to their fellow applicants have little trouble getting jobs. Perhaps, Waymarsh graduates’ academic jobs finding problem may result from the low quality of Waymarsh graduates. Furthermore, unless it can be shown that the worst case scenario of Waymarsh graduates is representative for all schools, any conclusions we reach are only applicable to Waymarsh graduates, not the entire group.
An additional problem with the argument is it assumes that more people reaching college age, or more demand in the market, would increase opportunity for academic job seekers. However, since prior graduates cannot find jobs, the supply will also increase since it is accumulating. In other words, the argument provides no statistically reliable evidence that shows that the increased demand of job opportunities is more than the increased supply of job hunters.
To sum up, the argument connecting Waymarsh University graduates and more demand in the market with increased opportunity in the academic market is not convincing. To back up his argument, the author should not use insufficient evidence to establish a general conclusion. Moreover, he needs to rule out other different conditions between Waymarsh University and other universities before making this overly simplistic statement. Thus, in order for the author to make a strong argument, he should provide more convincing statistics and examine all potential causes before jumping to conclusions.
Sample Essay #4
Citing demographic trends that conclude a greater number of people will be college-aged in the coming decade, the article predicts a huge increase in job vacancies for college teaching. As a result, college graduates will get jobs in college-level teaching more easily than at present, a trend that will benefit academic job applicants everywhere including those graduate from WU. The rosy prediction, however, is both oversimplied and unwarranted in three important respects.
Sample Essay #5
The argument states that throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it arduous to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. On the other hand, those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially difficult time finding such jobs. However, better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends state that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; therefore it is expected that the job market will improve significantly for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.
Firstly, I agree with this argument in general. It is clear that people who have earned graduate degrees as well as those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University have experienced difficulty in finding jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. This is expected to change in the future as recent demographic trends indicate that there will be an increased number of people reaching college age over the next decade so the number of positions of teachers will increase dramatically. The job market will improve for people willing to seek college-level teaching positions in their fields. Hence, the unemployment rate will be stable over the next ten years.
Secondly, things will be more balanced and even as compared to the last two decades. There will be greater availability of leisure time, personal incomes will increase, greater number of candidates will enroll in the university as well as the literacy rate of the country will increase. More leisure time will be available as a result families will spend more time outdoors and will participate in recreational activities. Since greater number of students will be admitted to the university, there will be greater availability of vacancies for teachers as a result the literacy rate will rise suddenly. People will live a better standard of life due to an increase in personal incomes. All these factors will eventually balance out the unemployment rate.
In conclusion, in the next ten years graduates from Waymarsh University and those with graduate degrees will likely find jobs as a result the job market will improve for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. In addition, personal incomes will rise, more leisure time will be available, and more students will be joining the university as a result the literacy rate will increase significantly. Furthermore, the unemployment rate will be stable and even in the future. The next ten years can be expected to be prosperous and beneficial for Waymarsh.
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The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh City newspaper.
“Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.”
No copyright infringement is intended.
Sample Essay #1
In this argument the author reach conclusion that better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Based on the demographic trends that indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years, the author maintain that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. At first glance, the author’s argument appears to be somewhat convincing, but there are some reasoning flaws in this argument.
In the first place, the author provides no evidence to support the claim that all academic job seekers including those from Waymarsh can find teaching jobs at college-level more easily in the next decade. The author falsely depends on gratuitous assumption that throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers. The bad situation of job market to teaching job seekers at college-level in last two decades and the improved status in the coming decade have no causal relationship. In addition, all other relevant reasons of bad hiring status to teaching job seekers at college level must be ruled out. In order to prove the conclusion, we need to know whether the market demand decrease or the structure change of market demand leads to all graduate hardly find jobs. if the reason is the latter, the market do not need the human resources of these academic specification. Thus even the market become prosperous, graduates will easily find teaching jobs. especially the status will be not improved if the graduates from Waymarsh can not meet the specification requirement in the market. moreover, the author’s assumption that the better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers is groundless without any evidence to prove.
In the second place, the Demographic trends cited by the author is too vague to be informative. The claim does not indicate the range which the trends are applicable, national or local. if the dempographic trends just represent the local situation other than the place in Waymarsh City, we can not figure out that the number of people will increase and more people will need to get college education in next decade. Even though the demographic trends show national situation, it do not necessarily that job market will improve dramatically. It is sufficient to assume the population increase will result in the increase of market demand to college education and the increase of market demand will lead to the recruitment increase of academic teachers. The people prefer to take short-term job training in the next decade, or the college make use of new technology to offer education program in place of the meathod of hiring more teachers.
In conclusion, the author fails to provide adequate justification for the reason that job seeker from Waymarsh will easily find teaching jobs in next decade. As it stands, the reasoning constitute some critical flaws. To strengthen the argument, the author would have to provide evidence to prove that the bad status of job market only came from the market situation, not from the market structure. to better assess the argument, we need additional detailed information about the demographic trends so that we can establish the conclusion whether the graduates from Waymarsh will easily find teaching job in next decade.
Sample Essay #2
This argument is based on 3 premises ; (1) Throughout the last two decades, those who get graduate degrees are hard to find the jobs in college. (2) People graduated from Waymarsh University especially were hard to find the jobs. (3) Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; Therefore job market will be improved dramatically for people seeking college level teaching positions in their fields. This argument is hard to convince me because it lacks the relation between job market in college and number of people, and it also didn’t tell us the position of people graduated from Waymarsh University in whole graduated people.
The relation between increasing number of people and job market in college is lacked in the premises. According to the argument, we didn’t know whether people number increasing will add job opportunities in college. There are several connections are missed. We can strengthen it by adding several premises. For example, adding one premise that study shows that increasing number of people will increases the number of student to strengthen it. Once the number of students is increased, One premise can be added; “For the purpose of fitting the ratio between teachers and students, teacher number need to be increased.” After we added these two premises, we have builded up the relationship between increasing number of people and job opportunities in college.
Even though we added the relationship between increasing number of people and job opportunities in college, the reputation of people graduated from Waymarsh are still unknown, or there are some other reasons that everybody didn’t want to hire people from it. Although the job opportunities are increased, people graduated from Waymarsh University still can find a job in college. In order to strengthen the argument, we can add the premise, “Compare to the people graduated from other university, people graduated from Waymarsh University is easier to find a job in college.”, then we know once the job opportunities are increased, people graduated from Waymarsh university are easier to find a job in college.
Sample Essay #3
In this article, the author believes that academic job opportunities will increase in the next ten years. In supporting his conclusion, he notes two pieces of evidence. First, people who earned graduate degrees found it very hard to get jobs teaching their specialties at the college level, especially for Waymarsh University students. Second, demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years. Although the argument may seem reasonable, a close examination reveals it is a groundless assertion. I disagree with the author’s argument because it is an oversimplification.
First, based on a specific example of difficulty in finding academic teaching jobs of Waymarsh University graduates, it is illogical to assume all people with graduate degrees also have difficulty in finding academic jobs. Even during times of recession, qualified people who are superior to their fellow applicants have little trouble getting jobs. Perhaps, Waymarsh graduates’ academic jobs finding problem may result from the low quality of Waymarsh graduates. Furthermore, unless it can be shown that the worst case scenario of Waymarsh graduates is representative for all schools, any conclusions we reach are only applicable to Waymarsh graduates, not the entire group.
An additional problem with the argument is it assumes that more people reaching college age, or more demand in the market, would increase opportunity for academic job seekers. However, since prior graduates cannot find jobs, the supply will also increase since it is accumulating. In other words, the argument provides no statistically reliable evidence that shows that the increased demand of job opportunities is more than the increased supply of job hunters.
To sum up, the argument connecting Waymarsh University graduates and more demand in the market with increased opportunity in the academic market is not convincing. To back up his argument, the author should not use insufficient evidence to establish a general conclusion. Moreover, he needs to rule out other different conditions between Waymarsh University and other universities before making this overly simplistic statement. Thus, in order for the author to make a strong argument, he should provide more convincing statistics and examine all potential causes before jumping to conclusions.
Sample Essay #4
Citing demographic trends that conclude a greater number of people will be college-aged in the coming decade, the article predicts a huge increase in job vacancies for college teaching. As a result, college graduates will get jobs in college-level teaching more easily than at present, a trend that will benefit academic job applicants everywhere including those graduate from WU. The rosy prediction, however, is both oversimplied and unwarranted in three important respects.
Sample Essay #5
The argument states that throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it arduous to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. On the other hand, those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially difficult time finding such jobs. However, better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends state that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; therefore it is expected that the job market will improve significantly for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.
Firstly, I agree with this argument in general. It is clear that people who have earned graduate degrees as well as those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University have experienced difficulty in finding jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. This is expected to change in the future as recent demographic trends indicate that there will be an increased number of people reaching college age over the next decade so the number of positions of teachers will increase dramatically. The job market will improve for people willing to seek college-level teaching positions in their fields. Hence, the unemployment rate will be stable over the next ten years.
Secondly, things will be more balanced and even as compared to the last two decades. There will be greater availability of leisure time, personal incomes will increase, greater number of candidates will enroll in the university as well as the literacy rate of the country will increase. More leisure time will be available as a result families will spend more time outdoors and will participate in recreational activities. Since greater number of students will be admitted to the university, there will be greater availability of vacancies for teachers as a result the literacy rate will rise suddenly. People will live a better standard of life due to an increase in personal incomes. All these factors will eventually balance out the unemployment rate.
In conclusion, in the next ten years graduates from Waymarsh University and those with graduate degrees will likely find jobs as a result the job market will improve for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. In addition, personal incomes will rise, more leisure time will be available, and more students will be joining the university as a result the literacy rate will increase significantly. Furthermore, the unemployment rate will be stable and even in the future. The next ten years can be expected to be prosperous and beneficial for Waymarsh.
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